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Some people think it is better to have many short holidays during the year. Others believe it would be beneficial to have fewer, longer vacations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #holidays #year #vacations
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9. KIA
Fututra
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Futura
 is a cross-coupe which perfectly composited with its aerodynamic body and includes elegance and sportiness.
This
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concept
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 has reached
4th
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 level of autonomous driving
system
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, which depicts the interior design, characterized by spaciousness and flexibility of transformation. The
car
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 is driven fully by
electric
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the electric
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 power plant and, at the same time, the battery with a high capacity is located under the passenger compartment floor. Four electric motors
situated
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in
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 the
wheels
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. LED headlights
provides
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to
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the model not only efficient lighting
,
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 but
also
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 give the
car
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 a completely cosmic appearance in the dark. 10. The
concept
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 “Inner
Car
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 Space” is the streamlined double-seater coupe with its eye-catching
elegancy
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. The
car
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 represents the vision of the American Cadillac brand as
personal
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 autonomous mobility of the future. The
concept
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 is completely electric. There is no
any
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control device in
cabin
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the cabin
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. All operations are controlled by
smart
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a smart
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 autopilot
system
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.
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,
the
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 autopilot, Cadillac Inner Space has artificial intelligence and augmented reality
system
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 facilities. For a more comfortable
landing
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 the
car
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 roof opens with doors, and meanwhile, separated seats
relocating
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 towards to passengers. 11. LYNK and Co
introduces
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 its new
concept
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car
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 “The
Next
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Automobile
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 has vertical headlights in a
sharp shaped
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 front part In
the
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front of the sharp-shaped
car
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 there are vertical headlights, as well as hidden sensors, which are located in the lower technological strip under the cover with an electric drive. We can notice a dynamic window line, aerodynamic
wheels
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 and a streamlined body, and
also
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,
rear
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a rear
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 bumper with a roof, which functions
of
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as
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 a spoiler.
This
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concept
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 anticipates
the
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LYNK and Co in a new direction of
a
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style.
Drive
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 engine in
front
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the front
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wheels
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 and
electric
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the electric
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 engine in
back
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the back
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wheels
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 of
this
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 model
are
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 being used for
propulsion
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the propulsion
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system
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 and motif of the vehicle.
As a result
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, it helps
to
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“The
next
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 day” to move in both hybrid and fully electric modes.
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