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The way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. Has this become a positive or negative development.

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The concept of socialising has increased a lot in
this
 era. Technology plays a vital role in the way individuals interact with each other these days.
Thus
this
 technological advancement has created a positive impact on everyone as it has become easy to communicate with people far away and
also
 they try to have conversations in
the
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unfamiliar mother tongues. It is irrefutable that, it has become possible due to the increased development in technology that
one
 can talk to their loved ones who are far away. The feature of video calling
in
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 a mobile phone lends a helping hand to them. With the use of
,
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internet
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one
 can avail of
this
 feature.
For example
, students who travel abroad for studies feel lonely after a period of time but these days video calling has changed
this
.
On the other hand
, trying to communicate in different languages has become trouble-free. In today's vast work culture, there are some times when
one
 needs to
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 with unfamiliar speech.
However
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 with the use of google translate it has become easy.
For example
,
one
 is travelling to china for a vacation where there is a language barrier but with the help of
,
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internet
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 the problem gets the solution. To sum up, the advancement in technology has definitely changed the procedure of communication with each other along with
the
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product development.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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