Food can be produced much more cheaply with the use of improved fertilisers and better machinery. However, some methods may be dangerous for human health and have negative effects on local communities. To what extent do you think it disadvantages outweigh its advantages.

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foodstuffs can be made at comparatively low costs using high-tech equipment , soil nutrition and anti-insect sprays. But
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of them has both positive and negative impacts on the rural population. I personally believe that the advantages of using new technologies to produce
food
outweigh its disadvantages and
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are elaborated below. On the one hand, recent studies show that 75% of the world's population suffers from hunger.
This
is mainly because of the non-availability of meals at an affordable price. We can not expect
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high productivity from a less nutritious population and if we can provide low-cost
food
for
this
sector who
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suffering from
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, we can make high a quality and effective workforce for the future planet.
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we will be able to reduce the medical expenses incurred by individuals suffering from various health issues initiated by lack of
food
especially in the younger ages of them
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future.
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, the use of machinery to produce
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large
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scale would lead to
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unemployment in local communities and using fertilizer and insect repellents
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a large scale would lead to increased diseases like kidney failure and cancer.
Moreover
, genetic changes applied to
food
to increase production may lead to health problems
such
as hormone
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imbalances
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and non-spread diseases.
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, I think these effects can be controlled by imposing rules and regulations
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time and it is very crucial to address hunger immediately. To conclude, providing a solution for lack of nutrition by promoting mass , low-cost production will payout the disadvantages associated with same.
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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