Some people believe that technology has made the lives of workers easier whilst other people disagree. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Undoubtedly, with the rapid development of
technology
,
workers
relying on advanced
technology
have been becoming more and more common and normal. Some people look upon using new
technology
as an effective way to solve problems,
others
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refer to it as
a
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harmful effect on
workers
. As for my perspective, I am favor in latter. The reason will be elaborated on as follows.
Workers
rely on
technology
which has standard solutions that cause them
lose
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the vital ability which helps them deal with problems in their own ways.
Therefore
, some
workers
who always rely on
technology
lead to they lost their important competitive ability as
time
past and they need to spend more
time
picking the ability back. Take my experience
for example
. When I was a child, I used to use a computer which can help me check the words to write an article.
However
,
this
caused me to need to spend more
time
on check the spelling of the words when did the examination which
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handwritten. New
technology
always attracts people to concentrate on the most important part of work.
However
,
this
means people might easier lose the details of the task. In the other words,
although
technology
has the advantage of solving problems, it could lead to
workers
forgetting to check the details. National Taiwan University survey shows that companies witch using
technology
to solve task has two times faster than those did not
use
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. Whereas, new
technology
cause those companies
have
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more than 20% stupid detail mistakes happen. It
also
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need
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spend more
time
checking and correcting mistakes. In conclusion,
technology
does not make the lives of
workers
easier because
workers
who rely on
technology
need more times to solve new issues.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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