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Some people believe that technology has made the lives of workers easier whilst other people disagree. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Undoubtedly, with the rapid development of
technology
,
workers
 relying on advanced
technology
 have been becoming more and more common and normal. Some people look upon using new
technology
 as an effective way to solve problems,
others
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 refer to it as
a
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harmful effect on
workers
. As for my perspective, I am favor in latter. The reason will be elaborated on as follows.
Workers
 rely on
technology
 which has standard solutions that cause them
lose
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 the vital ability which helps them deal with problems in their own ways.
Therefore
, some
workers
 who always rely on
technology
 lead to they lost their important competitive ability as
time
 past and they need to spend more
time
 picking the ability back. Take my experience
for example
. When I was a child, I used to use a computer which can help me check the words to write an article.
However
,
this
 caused me to need to spend more
time
 on check the spelling of the words when did the examination which
need
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 handwritten. New
technology
 always attracts people to concentrate on the most important part of work.
However
,
this
 means people might easier lose the details of the task. In the other words,
although
technology
 has the advantage of solving problems, it could lead to
workers
 forgetting to check the details. National Taiwan University survey shows that companies witch using
technology
 to solve task has two times faster than those did not
use
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. Whereas, new
technology
 cause those companies
have
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 more than 20% stupid detail mistakes happen. It
also
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need
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toneed
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 spend more
time
 checking and correcting mistakes. In conclusion,
technology
 does not make the lives of
workers
 easier because
workers
 who rely on
technology
 need more times to solve new issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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