Young drivers are careless & overconfident, and too many are killed in accidents. To eliminate this problem, we could teach children the skills of safe driving while they are at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Global,there have been high numbers
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road traffic accidents leading to
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in mortality rate
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young drivers. Some people have come
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the solution that
children
should undergo driving lessons even in
school
. I totally disagree with
this
point because they are still young and need more time for their studies,
also
they are explorers and likely to explore what they are being taught without supervision.
This
essay will
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on the negative effects of having driving lessons at a young age. The increasing number of accidents is overwhelming regardless, teaching
children
how to drive in
school
shouldn't be an option.
Firstly
,
school
children
are too young to learn about driving while they haven't even
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learning their
school
syllabus,
this
might cause distractions and
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increase
in their academic performance.
Secondly
,teenagers are very inquisitive and curious about a lot of things since it
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of their developmental stage and if they are taught they might want to explore because they think they have the zeal to do it and thereby causing more accidents.
For example
, a few years back,my uncle wanted to teach my male cousin how to drive so he can pick up his younger ones at
school
when he becomes an adult. Some months later,when his dad went to work,he started driving the car to parties and malls
instead
of him focusing on his assignments and
school
work,so one faithful day he went out with his friends and became drunk
instead
of him to call a taxi,he was
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and went ahead to drive which lead to a major accident that involved cutting his limbs off,
this
was a tragedy in our family and ever since
then
,my family especially the elders, are mindful of what they taught their kids cause they might experiment it when they are not at home. In conclusion,teaching
children
about driving at a young age is not safe but rather be taught when they have come of age
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they are more careful and able to learn about the do's and don't
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driving.
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