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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

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It is universally accepted that living in foreign
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 several benefits. While some
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people
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 totally disagree with
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 and lived in a new perspective that
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 from their upbringing.
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, these
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difficulty when it comes to communicating with
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foreigns
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people
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 in the classroom before moving to other
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 between learning
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language
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 the direction to the museum or asked
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 name.
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 these skills effectively to the test in the
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 situation. Despite the drawback above,
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 that there are many benefits of living abroad.
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 understanding of many cultures. As
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 a golden chance to
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broaden
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plenty of foreigners and experience the new
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 firsthand,
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gaining
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 a better insight.
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 other
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 reaffirm my position that
people
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encounter
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encounter
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hardships
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hardships
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, when they overcome these difficulties, they could enjoy many benefits of living abroad.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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