Many scientists believe that now we can study the behavior of a three-year-old child to see whether they will grow up to be criminals. To what extent do you think crime is determined by human nature? Is it possible to stop children from growing up to be criminals?

Nowadays, children's development is one of the most noticeable topics in the world. As science grows, some scientists claim that a person will become a criminal is depend on genes, while others argue that the environment and education are the main factors to determine whether a child admits to a crime in the future. Divergent as people's views on
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genes, probably the most significant one is that
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is not the same which means the genes
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environment and appropriate education.
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