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In many countries schools have severe problems with students behaivour. What do you think are the causes of it? What solutions can you suggest?

#countries #schools #students #behaivour
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There has been a rising issue in many nations that because of bad attitudes by
individuals
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, educational places are suffering a lot. There can be numerous reasons behind
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. I am going to discuss some of them and the methods to overcome these enormous concerns.
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, there are many institutes which offer both Cambridge and local board studies, many
people
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 opt for Cambridge and few get themselves enrolled with the local board. It is sometimes the attitude of a certain learning environment which leads to dispute and agitation from the
individuals
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, the biased response and discrimination among the students of two different groups can lead to aggression from some
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.
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 to
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, there is a rapid increment in fees on half yearly basis which can be the reason for bad responses from some
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, frequent changes in school management and administration can sometimes lead to an awkward response from students. One illustration of
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 is that, if a class teacher of a certain class gets changed at regular intervals
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 it would invite obnoxious behaviour of the
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. There are some possibilities by which any institute can remain safe from
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 aggression.
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, to have different campuses and administration for both Cambridge and local board
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, there can be a proper fee structure by which increments in fees would occur once a year only and that would not be difficult for the
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 to deal with. To put it in a nutshell, there are certain reasons behind agitation and the worst attitude by students which should not be ignored. If a learning environment follows the solutions in an efficient manner
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 the outcomes would be very fruitful.
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