The advent of the Internet has made it possible for people to work from home. Do you feel this working arrangement has more advantages or dis- advantages? Share personal examples in your essay.

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In the recent world, especially after the COVID-19
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pandemic
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, the number of people who
work
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remotely from their
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home
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has increased rapidly.
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phenomenon was largely supported by the development of the Internet. As a consequence, people obtained chances to
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flexibly without the stress of commuting
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there are a few significant drawbacks of remote working as well. I will raise some examples of both benefits and disadvantages and
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want to state my opinion that the practice has more advantages overall. The most significant advantage of
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from
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is its flexibility.
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, working mothers have more quality
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with their children within their residences. They
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have
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to take care of their aged parents while working.
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, theoretically, we can
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from anywhere around the world, where we can log on to the internet, as
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, workers now have
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many options for places and
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to engage in their jobs.
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, as citizens do not need to commute
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, there would be
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crowded trains and traffic jams. As a consequence, it is better for the environment.
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, there are some risks brought by the arrangement. The
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one
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communications and human bonds between colleagues.
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, at the beginning of the pandemic, we tried to do some online parties among
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at the office but we
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quickly
quicly
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realized that it was not efficient.
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, we tend to meet each other on the web only when business requirements come up.
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lack of communication
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some colleagues feel lonely and in serious
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they become mentally unstable.
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, overall, these disadvantages can be overcome if we wisely balance the
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and
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at
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. In conclusion,
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there are a few serious drawbacks exist for
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from
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scheme, I believe the benefits
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far outnumber
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the drawbacks. It is a great new plan which can expand the possibility of working style for us and for the generations to come.
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