Some people think that many renowned personalities are popular because of their riches and extravagant lifestyle, rather than their achievements, and this influences the youth in a negative way.
Some
people
say that the majority of celebrities are well-known due to their wealth and luxury
lifestyle Replace the word
luxurious
instead
of their successes and this
has a negative impact on young people
. Overall I agree with the statement. In this
essay
I will explain why.
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To begin
with , the chief reason why starts
and athletes are famous is social media. Correct your spelling
stars
That is
, the more financial aspects of their life be
published on the Internet , the more their hard-workings and achievement will be ignored. A good example of Change the verb form
are
this
is Beckam`s family ,who have worked hardly
for many years ,all of their trips and cars are always on the websites . Replace the word
hard
This
in turn media content would have a significant effect on audience
about intrusive famous Add an article
the audience
people
.
On the other hand
, the
young Correct article usage
apply
and
teenagers are likely to consider celebrities ,introduced Correct word choice
apply
Replace the word
were
where by
Correct your spelling
whereby
Internet
and News , as their role models. To put it differently , as long as Correct article usage
the Internet
wealth
and Correct article usage
the wealth
fancy
lifestyle of stars Correct article usage
the fancy
appears
to the youth, they will probably set financial goals as Change the verb form
appear
a lifelong ambitions
. take Correct the article-noun agreement
lifelong ambitions
a lifelong ambition
low
tendency of students for higher education Correct article usage
the low
for example
; they tend to make money instead
of going university
.So as result , not only Change preposition
to university
the
society will Correct article usage
apply
be face
with a lack of specialists and inventors , but Change the verb form
be faced
also
the young people
miss a chance of
personal development in their lifetime.
To sum up , I personally take the view that the young can be affected inappropriately by Change preposition
for
luxury
lifestyle of well-known individuals .Add an article
the luxury
a luxury
This
is because, they just
represented through social nets as Add a missing verb
are just
the
rich models, irrespective of their efforts and Correct article usage
apply
prosperities
.Replace the word
prosperity
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