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Many young people regularly change their job over the years. What are the reasons for this? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Changing
jobs
 frequently among youngsters is noticeable over a period of time.
This
 essay will discuss the reason behind it, as well as the consequence of the stream.
Although
 the trend of altering
jobs
 is common, in my opinion, it has no benefit and leaves
people
 ambitious. One factor that leads to
people
 being changed their
job
 is reaching the top of their careers within a short time. Particularly,
people
 who suffered from need, want to be rich in a short period.
Secondly
, high paid
jobs
 are tempting to
job
 seekers and provoke them for switching
jobs
. If individuals get their desired salary in another company, they may jump up with new hope. In Bangladesh,
for instance
, IT persons change
jobs
 only because of promotion with the high payment they desire. In my concern, the effect of the
job
-changing concept may harm the career than build it as the focus of the work may be interrupted by it.
However
, if the person change
job
 leaves a notice to
work place
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 and
completing
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 his task before leaving, it will add a good mark to his career. Sometimes
people
 end up with a tag of irresponsibility at working place for their vulnerable behaviour of changing
jobs
. If the individual who holds an important position at work change
job
, the employee will be affected.
For example
, if a teacher quits her
job
 in the middle of the year, the school and class will face problems because of incomplete lessons and activities. To sum up, considering both points discussed above, the most rational conclusion to be drawn is that, despite there being many opportunities
people
 see in changing
jobs
 who are ambitious, the disadvantages may not overweight the advantage of staying in the same
job
 till the end.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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