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Young drivers are careless & overconfident, and too many are killed in accidents. To eliminate this problem, we could teach children the skills of safe driving while they are at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Globally ,there have been high numbers of road traffic accidents leading to an increase in mortality rate ,especially among young drivers. Some people have come up with the solution that
children
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 should undergo driving lessons even in
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. I totally disagree with
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 point because they are still young and need more time for their studies,
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 they are explorers and likely to explore what they are being taught without supervision.
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 essay will expatiate the negative effects of having driving lessons at a young age. The increasing number of accidents is overwhelming regardless, teaching
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 how to drive in
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 shouldn't be an option.
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,
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children
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 are too young to learn about driving while they haven't even finished learning their
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 syllabus,
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 might cause distractions and decrease their academic performance.
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,teenagers are very inquisitive and curious about a lot of things since it is part of their developmental stage and if they are taught they might want to explore because they think they have the zeal to do it and thereby causing more accidents.
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, a few years back,my uncle wanted to teach my male cousin how to drive so he can pick up his younger ones at
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 when he becomes an adult. Some months later,when his dad went to work,he started driving the car to parties and malls
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 of him focusing on his assignments and
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 work,so one faithful day he went out with his friends and became drunk
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 of him to call a taxi,he was overconfident and went ahead to drive which lead to a major accident that involved cutting his limbs off,
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 was a tragedy in our family and ever since
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,my family especially the elders, are mindful of what they taught their kids cause they might experiment it when they are not at home. In conclusion,teaching
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 about driving at a young age is not safe but rather be taught when they have come of age when they are more careful and able to learn about the do's and don't of driving.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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