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Stidents should pay tuition fee by themselves. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#stidents #tuition #fee
Nowadays,
students
 having on young age loans because they need to pay for their own intuition. I believe that
everyone
 needs access to
education
 but is not only responsabilty from the government. In
this
 easy I explain in which extend someone needs to pay for their own
education
. On the one hand it is not possible for
everyone
 to pay for their
school
. By forcing all
students
 to pay for their own
education
 the not wealthy
children
 will be left out to having the possibility to become a doctor, laywer or following another expensieve
school
 program. If
everyone
 needs to pay by themselves we creading a schoolsystem
that is
 only accessable for
children
 from rich parents.
For example
: underpriviliged
children
 with very good grades can not become a doctor because they can not afford to pay
school
 program. The countries up with only the privilege
children
 with no good grades but they get good
education
 on the best university. The best
students
 will be left out for
this
 opportunity.
On the other hand
, we can not expect that the goverment pays for all the intuition because the costs are to high.
For example
: if all the money goes to
education
 than healthcare will be left out for a part in the government funding.
Also
, by giving
everyone
 easy access to free
education
 there is a change the
students
 have less motivation to finish their program.
Thus
 it is better to a having pressure to finish
school
 in not to high cost. The governement help out by giving grants to
students
 with good grades and by finish
school
 they have not debts left to pay off. In conlusion, I believe we need to educate the
students
 who can become the best doctors, scientist, etc.
Therefore
 the governemnt need to have programs to help out for the
students
 who not can affort to pay for the
education
, but it does not need to be free money. I believe a performance grant is a good option for the governemt and a underprivileged student.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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