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Modern technology has made it easier for individuals to download copyrighted music and books from the internet for no charge. To what extent is this a positive or a negative development?

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Nowadays through the internet, almost everyone has access to free
books
 and
music
.
This
 goes with downloading these,
although
 they have a copyright. But what exactly are the pros and cons of that? In
this
essay
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 I will write about the positive effects of
this
 development and its drawbacks. On one side, modern
technology
 leads to more illegal downloads of
music
 and
books
, which means that musicians and authors don't get the money they deserve.
For example
, many
people
 would just download
music
 from youtube
instead
 of paying a Spotify abonnement.
This
 has obviously quite an impact on the artists
,
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 and is
therefore
 a negative development. But looking at the other side, a lot of
people
 can
finally
also
 get the opportunity to enjoy
music
 and
books
 for free, without it directly having an impact on the income of the artists. It's great that more
people
 can have access to that.
Also
, we shouldn't forget, that without modern
technology
, current artists would probably never have made it to where they are now. Nowadays, it is much easier to publish songs and to make oneself popular through social media, youtube and Spotify. In conclusion, modern
technology
 leads to some illegal downloads of
music
 and
books
, but it just offers the possibility to many
people
 to have access to
books
 and
music
, which is very important. I believe that modern
technology
 had more positive effects on society and the life of many
people
,
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 and that those are outweighing the negative parts.
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