IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 7.5

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think thia is a positive or a negative development?

#people #health #alternative #medicines #treatments #doctor #thia #development
Nowadays, IT is not hard to find people that are trying to treat diseases on their own, whether for money or another reason which they think is worthwhile .
However
, I strongly disagree with
this
 practice.
First
 and foremost, treating your health problems by yourself is not fair to those who have been studying for years and years to exercise their profession. It is not easy to treat someone, not to mention that everybody is different from each other.
For example
, a doctor can have an established method to treat a health problem, whether the organism is responding in a different way than it should, you will need a different treatment, and the doctor
also
 needs to know how to do it.
Furthermore
, when using alternative medicine
instead
 of conventional treatments, can delay the use of medications that have their efficiency proven, and
also
 give time for an illness like cancer that would be curable to become lethal.
In addition
, a study made by Yale University showed that patients who have curable cancer have more probability to die when they use inefficient methods like natural treatments. Some people may argue that because it is a natural treatment, it cannot bring hazards to the body.
However
, in spite of being natural, it can be toxic for the liver and other parts of your organism.
Finally
, I believe
that is
 safer to look for a doctor even if you only want to carry out routine exams. It is by and large that they are prepared for
this
, and will know how to help you
Submitted by tdomingos615 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: