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Some feel that punishment should focus more on rehabilitation instead of long prison terms. Others feel prison terms are important for social stability.Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Nowadays, the number of countries that soften their law because of the humaneness conception dramatically increased. And that’s why a lot of punishment became replaced with
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 support
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 it’s not enough. It is agreed that long prison terms are vital for general stability.
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 , actually
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intruders in a positive way.
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, a significant part of
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 believes that
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 is the key to treating these
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 and preventing them from committing the same
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 when they get out of jail.
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, in Switzerland,
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 of long prison terms.
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 who committed
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 due to mental disorders start treatment in a prison and
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 are transferred to special institutions where they continue treatment until complete recovery.
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 with various mental disorders. In general ,quite reasonable practice.
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, even after full
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 there is a high probability that
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 will commit the same
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 again and again.
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, in the USA , criminals are more prisoned than rehabilitated.
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the USA is the highest indicator of imprisonment in the world. As a lot of Americans believe that criminals always remain criminals . They reckon that offenders could imitate recovery in order to be freed
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quicker. From my point of view , humans who managed to commit heavy
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 will do it again .
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,it is proven by a lot of psychiatrists that you can’t be sure for 100
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 that a person is fully recovered and no longer suffer from the disorder. To summarise, actually
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 it’s a not bad idea. But
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safer themselves if long prisons term will be applied at the same time.
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,
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 won’t replace imprisonment completely and authorities should be focused more on long terms rather than
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