Large companies use sporting events to promote their products. Some people think this has a negative impact on sports. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Products

are advertised in sporting

events

by big

companies

. To a certain

extent

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I agree that

this

has some negative impact on

sports

However

, I

also

think that it brings a lot of benefits. Admittedly, large

companies

using sporting

events

to promote their goods have some drawbacks. One of them is that unhealthy

products

have the opportunity to sponsor sporting

events

. Famous athletes often advertise for their sponsors and

this

particularly affected children because they prefer to follow their idols.

Consequently

, children consume unhealthy

products

more while they are not really aware of

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the negatives

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negatives

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negative

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impact of these dangerous

products

on their health. Another drawback is

sports

talents get high salaries at early ages. When you have a huge amount of money, which might cause uncontrollable spending and

this

is easy to see in young people, who frequently lack financial management skills and rarely think about saving. In fact, newspapers often report on young talents falling into lavish lifestyles and drug addiction because of having too much money at a very young age. In my opinion, despite the aforementioned negatives, it

also

has many advantages to

sports

Firstly

, Clubs and teams in

sports

are given funding to continue operating. We know that maintaining a

sports

club or team needs a lot of expenses and they usually come from sponsors. If large

companies

don't spend money to promote their

products

in sporting

events

, clubs and teams in

sports

are going to disband for lack of finance.

This

also

lead

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leads

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to organizers cannot organize sporting

events

due to no clubs or team joining.

Secondly

, when sporting

events

remain, it will bring attention to

sports

, inspiring the

generation to play

sports

. In reality, in Vietnam, since the national football team of Vietnam achieve many achievements internationally, now we can see most Vietnamese love and play football everywhere. In conclusion,

although

big

companies

promoting their

products

in sporting

events

bring some negatives. it seems to me that

this

has more benefits.

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