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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#money #businesses #responsibilities
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There is no doubt that businessmen aim to earn some money, while some people consider that they should take on corresponding responsibilities. In my opinion, I completely agree with
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 view and believe that
companies
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 ought to do more for
society
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 than simply make money.
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 of all, it is justified that
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 make some money and
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 they can survive in fierce competition and
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 extend their scale. Every
company
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 need to pay for daily consumption and workers' salary, as well as building refurbishments.
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, it seems logical that the priority of any
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 should be to cover its running costs. From an opposite angle,
society
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 is more likely to fall into chaos and workers find themselves standing on the unemployment line since the
company
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 cannot afford these payments.
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, a
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 can only make a positive contribution to
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 if it is in a good financial state.
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,
companies
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 should not be run with the sole aim of maximizing profit; they have a wider role to play in
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. One social obligation that owners and managers have is to treat their employees well, rather than exploit them.
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, they could pay a 'living wage' to ensure that workers have a good quality of life. I
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 like the idea that businesses could utilize a proportion of their profits to support local charities, environmental projects or educational organizations.
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,
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 of trying to minimise their tax payments by using accounting loopholes, I believe that
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 bosses should be happy to contribute to
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 through the tax system. In conclusion, I believe that
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 should place as much importance on their social responsibilities as they do on their financial objectives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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