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Social media sites like Facebook and Twiter have more negative effects than possitive effects. How much you agree with this opinion and why?

#media #sites #facebook #twiter #effects #possitive
Last
 decade social
media
 become more famous. We should say
that is
 very important and necessary.
On the other hand
, we have to consider
about
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our future.
Firstly
, researchers should investigate why digital applications are famous and why people use regularly these platforms. Especially,
new
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 generation is using these digital applications always and they forget to spend time
out of
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social
media
. Probably can be a problem for the
next
 generations. As adults we must do something, at least we should do for our children. In my opinion, social
media
 users show their life through these platforms.
However
, they show only good things about their life but they do not them highlight. According to me,
this
 is a big problem for them. If they spend time in a virtual area they will not be able to communicate with their peer.
As a result
, we have been using social
media
 for almost twenty years. If we are not careful we will lose the
next
 generation.
Otherwise
, a lot of people will be
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 by
this
 issue.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative effects
  • positive effects
  • increased exposure
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • mental health
  • productivity
  • privacy concerns
  • fake news
  • misinformation
  • time-consuming
  • addictive
  • superficial connections
  • real-life interactions
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