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Some people believe social media is very important in our daily life, other believe it is waste of time. Discuss both the views and give your opinion

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In the
last
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decades
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 the way
people
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 communicate with each other has experienced a notorious revolution, and social
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 is
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responsible for
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 significant transformation.
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 method of communication has its supporters and detractors: the first group argues that social
media
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 plays a capital role in our lives, but the second supports the idea that it is just a loss of
time
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. I believe that both points of view can be right to a certain extent, as I will evaluate in the present essay. On the one hand, nobody can deny the fact that social
media
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 has become an essential part of our society.
People
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 might not probably imagine their lives without social
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applications
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,
such
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 as WhatsApp, Instagram, Twitter or LinkedIn, anymore.
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, we use them for a wide range of activities,
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 communication, leisure purposes,
express
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 our opinions,
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 relationships both in private and professional
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, etc. To illustrate the impact of social
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 in our lives, we can think about
wheter
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whether
 the public could stop using instant messaging
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 as WhatsApp; in my
opinion
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this
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 is highly unlikely to happen.
On the other hand
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, it is undeniable that these
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 are designed not only to respond
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people's
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 necessities but
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 to catch our attention as much as possible.
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, if individuals are not able to control the usage of these
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, they can fall into their trap and spend an excessive amount of
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while
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using them.
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, many
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 check their messages or social
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 when they are with their friends,
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 of enjoying the
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 with them.
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, some social
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, namely TikTok or Instagram, are
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 for absorbing plenty of
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of
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 their users, as they have an addictive impact on them. In conclusion, I agree with both statements: social
media
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 is a cornerstone in today's society and it
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 can be a loss of
time
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 on certain occasions if it is not used adequately. I believe the best solution would be to learn how to live with
this
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 tool and learn how to use it in a correct manner.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly separate your arguments with more distinct linking phrases to improve clarity.
task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples that illustrate your points clearly and explicitly.
content
The essay presents a balanced view on both sides of the argument, showcasing a nuanced understanding of the topic.
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