In the past, people used to travel abroad to look for many differences from their home country. Nowadays, cities throughout the world are becoming more and more similar. What are the reasons? Is this a positive or negative development?

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Increasingly, globalization has been changing people’s lives and those who like to travel abroad to learn about cultures don’t need it anymore. Nowadays, an individual can discover culture curious only using a smartphone. I have my opinion and would like to discuss both sides in

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, a good reason for cities

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like others is globalism, which

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people travel to outside of the home, only using technology devices.

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, for many years I’ve been studying English with a teacher from Canada,

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, she was born in India. So,

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, I’ve learned a lot about both cultures which I can apply to many learners daily.

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, an Indian person taught me wonderful habits from Canadians,

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as celebrating

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among friends and families, and Brazilians don’t celebrate it.

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is the magic provided by globalization.

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, still talking about globalism, many countries around the world where there is an open market have been improving their economies, and society has been increasing their incomers as well.

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, marketplaces

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as Amazon, and Mercado Libre and so, have been boosting the number of entrepreneurs worldwide, and most of them have been hiring more and more employees each year. To be honest, I’m not an expert in economics and politics,

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, poverty

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going on for fewer than decades

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is the reason why I support it, humanity must deserve the same opportunity, and

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provides equality. In conclusion, governments should intensify rules and maintain cities’ identity, and

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open market investments for attracting more and more international business and money.

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Task Achievement score is moderate. The response addresses the prompt but lacks a clear development of ideas and examples. Make sure to fully address each aspect of the prompt in a clear and comprehensive manner.

Coherence and Cohesion

Coherence and Cohesion score is satisfactory. The logical structure of the essay is somewhat clear, with some portion of appropriate introduction and conclusion present. However, the essay needs better organization and linking of ideas to improve overall coherence and cohesion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

267 words

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