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Nowadays there is a trend that media focusses on problems and emergencies rather than positive developments. Some people think this is harmful to individuals and socities. Do you agree?

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Media
 plays an important role in our society. A large number of
people
 said that these
media
 reporters broadcast only negative and emergency
news
 rather than positive
news
 to get attention which is detrimental to our society. I completely disagree with the statement. In
this
 essay, we are going to outline why I think publishing negative
news
 is good as far as they are true.
First
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 and foremost benefit of letting the public know about what is getting wrong in our society through
media
 is getting attention really well and
as a result
, responsible bodies take the action right away. In the covid days,
for instance
, there was a shortage of CT scan machines and Oxygen in hospitals and the medical staff wanted to help patients but because they did not have proper facilities they could not able to help them and
therefore
people
 were dying. A reporter published a whole story in the
news
 after that, not only hospitals received the required things from responsible bodies but
also
 a lot of rich
people
 offer help. The more we spread
news
, the more
the
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help we get.
On the other hand
,
this
 sometimes creates problems as well. Some reporters not all but some, to get publicity by publishing
news
 which is not right and cause of their stupidity other
people
 have to suffer. Recently,
for example
, the
news
 was published by a YouTuber
news
 channel that car companies have a shortage of workers
that
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 is why customers will not get the new cars until five years from now
this
news
 got viral,
hence
 investors got panic and they started selling shares and car companies lost a lot of share value in the share market. If some authentic person had checked the
news
then
this
 could have happened. In Conclusion, even though showing the problems in
media
 as negative
news
 resolved the issue, the reporters should authenticate the
news
 before publishing so it does not affect other
people
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 business.
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