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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study

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Over recent times leaving abroad is increasing so dramatically for various purposes like studying, working, travelling or
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new business. It will provide a lot of benefits but there are still some drawbacks .In
this
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Firstly
, it gives an opportunity to have an adventure .
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, gaining experience by doing research in one sphere of science. It would not really harm
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job prospects because employers generally look favourably
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 it. And it helps to broaden the horizon to become a rounded person by offering good chances . In
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 individuals buy some time to things through for the future.
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, it is
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 way to create
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 more vibrant social life by making a network of friends from that country.
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 person above all,
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 experience and opportunity to taste new cuisines and learn about alien
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,people and
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.
On the other hand
,there are some negative sides
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 living abroad. The
first
 problem is people are unable to spend time with their families and friends.
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 interest in working or studying. Another drawback is while living overseas migrants encounter different difficulties
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 instance, culture shock, language barrier,homesickness and lack of support.
Consequently
,these will lead to psychological obstacles. All in all, there are both pros and cons of migrating foreign country in spite of the fact that it helps to create more chances for a good life. But many people find it difficult when they face social problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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