Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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that current

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is making society more communicative, whereas others advocate that advanced

technology

is making them less outgoing. I personally agree with

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statement, since modern

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can damage our mentality and make us lazy. Nowadays, there are

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every day. The progress of all mankind depends on

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because people constantly want to improve their lives.

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makes

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a computer or

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. At the moment these gadgets

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the most popular

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in the world. We can communicate, share and browse pages on social networks and we have a picture that we’re social.

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, these latest

technologies

make us less sociable and we become lazy. Advanced

technologies

cause dependence on them, since they are convenient for us and give us pleasure.

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, when we use the phone and sit in apps we like we get a dose of dopamine.

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big for us, so we don’t want to talk to someone in real life.

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we really need,

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we become lazy. To conclude, modern

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is bad for our sociability and our condition. While

technology

has many advantages, it makes us less dependent.

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Topic Vocabulary:

online marketplaces
mobile payment options
personalized advertising
accessibility
compare prices
decision fatigue
impulse buying
financial imprudence
privacy and data security
transformed
streamlined
user-friendly

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Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Fast food is becoming a part of people's daily life everwhere, and this has had negative effects on our lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that reading stories form a book is better than watching tv or playing computer games for children to what extent do you agree or disagree.

What could be done to encourage people to buy local products? An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages for both individuals and companies to shopping online?