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What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice

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There are several extraordinary discoveries in the
last
 century which helps my country to improve the living standards of people's lives and make their life easier. Discoveries
such
 as the telephone and the advisement to the medical field have proven to be the most important discoveries for changing and shaping society .
However
, I believe the most beneficial discovery is easy
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access to the
internet
 facility for the common man.
Firstly
, the
internet
 is the perfect place for working and connecting people worldwide. Many online companies instantly connect with the community to provide services and products faster. Which saves time and energy for the customers.
Similarly
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 the
internet
 helps to communicate with family members and loved ones living abroad.
Furthermore
, with the help of GSP technology, the person reaches his/her destination without any difficulty.
Secondly
, the
internet
 gives an endless supply of knowledge and information. Search engines like , Google can answer any question which is asked.
Furthermore
, there are millions of videos on Youtube which help to teach any topic or subject. The
internet
also
 gives access to the news without any delay
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