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Plastic bags, plastic bottels and plastic packaging are bad for environment. - What damage does plastic do the environment? - What can be done by government & individuals solve this problem?

#plastic #bags #bottels #environment #damage #government #individuals
In
the
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recent decades, the number of
plastic
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products
pruducts
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products
 has significantly increased due to several reasons
such
 as cheapness.
Consequently
, plastics have a lot of environmental disadvantages
such
 as prolonged decomposition.
Therefore
, some solutions like
reduction
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 of
plastic
 goods and recycling can be effective.
Firstly
, the most important problem
about
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plastic
 products is definitely
decomposition
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the decomposition
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 time of them.
Accordingly
,
in
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 average it will be taken 100 years that
a
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plastic
 is decayed in nature.
As a result
, during
this
 process surely there are a lot of negative impacts on the environment.
For example
, many
plastic
 bags that
dropped
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 in jungles during
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hiking
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hicking
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hiking
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 or camping
,
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 might be
entred
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entered
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 soil and water
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resources
resourses
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resources
, so, it takes decades
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before
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 it can
be vanished
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 naturally.
secondly
, it can be mentioned governments and
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the publics
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publics
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public
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 should support some eco-friendly products and trends in order to
decreasing
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the plastic's
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plastic's
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plastic
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 population. In
this
 regard, it can be seen, there are a lot of recycling factories have been founded all over the world in order to
decomposing
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plastic
 garbages and
making
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 them reusable.
For instance
, it is evident, people
is
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 encouraged to separate petrochemical supplies
while
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they
thay
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they
 want to throw them out. In conclusion, officials and societies have
a
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 essential responsibility
about
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ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 and human
garbages
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garbage
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 because it is a global problem. correspondingly, both governments and individuals should make a concerted effort to keep
a
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clean earth.
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