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Some people say thhat the only reason for learnig a foreign langua is in order to tavel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #thhat #reason #learnig #langua #tavel #work #country #someone #language
The world is a diverse globe. Despite the fact that the primary aim of individuals learning a new
language
 is to relocate and work abroad, I believe that there are much more advantages that
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 with being bilingual. To start with, being able to speak in other tongues has launched a lot of folks into working and
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 at a global level.
This
 is because they are strategically located for job offers and opportunities that may arise from other countries.
Also
, people with
clear
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 understanding of major languages like French, Spanish, Hebrew, and Greek are few and far between and so securing
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 rare privileges becomes
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 easier.
For instance
, an appointment was awarded
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 greek tutor on the basis of his expert knowledge of the German
language
.
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 came with relocation benefits. There are several other benefits of being
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 in other languages.
Firstly
, it affords one the ability to be able to socialize with people from other backgrounds or cultural heritage, and
thus
 reduce any unnecessary tension.
Secondly
, our opinion of their
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ways
way
waysl
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ways
 of life becomes enlightened.
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 helps us to better appreciate other traditions or customs. To illustrate, in
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, it has been documented that visitors with
expert
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 understanding of the Arabic
language
 very rarely offend the law
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Finally
, learning a new
language
 can be exciting, with people learning it just for the fun of it. In conclusion, being fluent
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 languages has exponential benefits,
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 perks are just the tip of
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 iceberg.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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