many people believe that cooking is an essential life skill and should be taught to boyd and girs in schools. others disagree and believe it is a waste of schoo time. to what extent do you agree?

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and constant struggles for power there
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proportion of millennials who take the view that just acquiring academic skills won’t be enough for
this
modern lifestyle and learning how to cook dishes will be needed to meet
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. On the
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, there are fierce opponents to
this
outlook who argue that a flaw in
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argument is that it does not take into consideration the value of time. I readily disagree with
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standpoint.
To begin
with, childhood obesity is reaching epidemic levels, owing to the fact that juvenile’s awareness about food value
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not increased. It is proven that facts which have been taught in schools tremendously affect offspring’s future life.
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if they have learned from
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age which meals are nutritious and which
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of them
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just fattening and greasy, not only can they follow
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, but they
also
can avoid
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being exposed
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various diseases. By the way of illustration, nowadays, pupils should be stayed alert to the influence fast foods have on their health by their teachers.
On the other hand
, we are witnessing that
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generation
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highly engaged in passive hobbies and
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sedentary lifestyle exerts
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effect on their both mental and physical health.
Furthermore
, it seems that they are not permitted
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their energy. So, devoting time to
such
courses paves the way for being active and
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them to join in physical
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that, not only do mitigate their stress
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but
also
broaden their horizon.
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part in an extra curriculum which prompted us to
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ethnic dishes. Never can you envisage how effective those courses
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, not only did we gain
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experience and gradually, we obtained a rudimentary knowledge of different meals, but
also
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understanding because we were
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to cook
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other indigenous dishes of our country. Another overt advantage is that we learn how to act in teamwork
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. In conclusion, dedicating more time to
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courses should be given priority by
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authorities.
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boys as well as girls should be engorged to participate, the reason why is that these experiences are valuable whether for
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or boys and both of whom can charge their battery through these classes.
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