many people believe that cooking is an essential life skill and should be taught to boyd and girs in schools. others disagree and believe it is a waste of schoo time. to what extent do you agree?
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and constant struggles for power there Replace the word
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are
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significant
proportion of millennials who take the view that just acquiring academic skills won’t be enough for Add an article
a significant
this
modern lifestyle and learning how to cook dishes will be needed to meet Add an article
the expectation
expectation
. On the Fix the agreement mistake
expectations
flipside
, there are fierce opponents to Correct your spelling
flip side
this
outlook who argue that a flaw in this
argument is that it does not take into consideration the value of time. I readily disagree with this
standpoint.
To begin
with, childhood obesity is reaching epidemic levels, owing to the fact that juvenile’s awareness about food value are
not increased. It is proven that facts which have been taught in schools tremendously affect offspring’s future life. Change the verb form
is
Thus
if they have learned from young
age which meals are nutritious and which Add an article
a young
one
of them Correct pronoun usage
ones
are
just fattening and greasy, not only can they follow Change the verb form
is
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a health-related-diet
health-related-diet
, but they Correct your spelling
health-related diet
also
can avoid of
being exposed Change preposition
apply
of
various diseases. By the way of illustration, nowadays, pupils should be stayed alert to the influence fast foods have on their health by their teachers.
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to
On the other hand
, we are witnessing that new
generation Correct article usage
the new
are
highly engaged in passive hobbies and Change the verb form
is
this
sedentary lifestyle exerts negative
effect on their both mental and physical health. Add an article
a negative
Furthermore
, it seems that they are not permitted release
their energy. So, devoting time to Fix the infinitive
to release
such
courses paves the way for being active and allow
them to join in physical Correct subject-verb agreement
allows
actively
that, not only do mitigate their stressReplace the word
activities
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
broaden their horizon. For instance
, when I was a primary school student I must
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just
took
part in an extra curriculum which prompted us to Change the verb form
take
made
ethnic dishes. Never can you envisage how effective those courses Change the form of the verb
make
was
, not only did we gain Correct subject-verb agreement
were
worth
experience and gradually, we obtained a rudimentary knowledge of different meals, but Replace the word
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also
broaden cross cultural
understanding because we were Add a hyphen
cross-cultural
practicing
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practising
to cook
other indigenous dishes of our country. Another overt advantage is that we learn how to act in teamwork Change the verb form
cooking
project
.
In conclusion, dedicating more time to Fix the agreement mistake
projects
this
courses should be given priority by Correct determiner usage
these
schools
authorities. Change the noun form
school
Beside
boys as well as girls should be engorged to participate, the reason why is that these experiences are valuable whether for Correct your spelling
Besides
girl
or boys and both of whom can charge their battery through these classes.Fix the agreement mistake
girls
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