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More and more students are choosing to study at college and universities in foreign countries. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks

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A greater number of pupils are selecting an education at college and
universities
 in a foreign land. Taking into
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consideration
considiration
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consideration
 the pros and cons of studying abroad. I would like to emphasize that benefits prevail
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over disadvantages
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. Many
students
 are selecting foreign
universities
 to build a good career, it has a plethora of benefits.
Students
 learn a lot of things while living in abroad,
firstly
, they become more independent
such
 as they are responsible for cleaning rooms, laundry, cooking,
pay
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 electricity bills and rent. The foreign government
also
 provides some working hours for
students
. So, they can earn some money for living expenses.
Secondly
,
student
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the student
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 can broaden their horizons by moving
into
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to
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 foreign countries. There are many people living in abroad who
are belong
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 to different cultures
,
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 so
that
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students
 can learn about their languages,
cultures
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and cultures
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 and gain knowledge about them.
Finally
, many foreign
universities
 provide better courses for
students
. They can get better job opportunities with good wages by studying at good
Universities
. On the other side, it can be irrefutable that it has some negative aspects as well. When
students
 are studying in a foreign country they may face some difficulties. The main problem is a language barrier, if the student is not good
in
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 communication skills,
then
 they may find difficulties to survive in their community.
Furthermore
, some children are missing their family and it can lead to depression that may be put bad impact on their
study
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studies
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. Many
students
 face problems with paperwork like refusing visa applications,
to find
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 suitable accommodation and paying their bills. So,
this
 may
also
 add more pressure on
students
 and interrupt their studies. To recapitulate, it is undeniable that the study at abroad has
own
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 benefits and drawbacks. Despite
of
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all its disadvantages, I believe that it has more advantages
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therefore
 young people should be encouraged to study in foreign countries.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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