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not all students enjoy school sports lessons.Should older teenagers have the option of doing volunteer work in their local communities instead? what is your opinion?

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A lot of students are really into sports. They prefer to spend their time at school and do athletics. But many of the pupils didn’t interest in the sport. Surely students should be doing fun due to stay healthy and fit. Sport is one of the important things in our life
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 they can be volunteering. I guess it’s a great idea because you can allow
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 in the open air, surrounded by birdsong . By doing conservation work in some of the most beautiful parts of the country. It’s mainly volunteering is a way of helping others. It is giving a person time and the ability to help someone who may be in need of help . As well as at the same time they can do exercises and help improve nature. And the good thing about you can develop new skills discover new passions, gaining new insights about yourself and the world around you volunteering covers it all. Volunteering can mean learning about different communities, organizations, and fields, as well as learning more about yourself. In ,
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 I guess it is really interesting and funny because you can plot land
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 gardened together by a group of people sharing the garden work , the decision-making, and the harvest.
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