Your are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter Say what the problem is Describe the accommodation you thought you were getting Ask the provider to solve the problem

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Dear Sir, I am writing to grab your attention on a serious matter which I am facing in my residence. I am not happy with

this

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accommodation and facing difficulties while living here.

To begin

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with, I am a foreign student from Pakistan, I took

admission

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admitted

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business management at your college and applied for college accommodation after getting admission. Before the commencement of

classes

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,classes

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accommodation was

allot

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to me, but

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room

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the room

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is too congested and there is

also

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ventilation

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a ventilation

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problem.

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Moreover

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,Moreover

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gas pipe is

also

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not functional due to which I have suffered

cold

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a cold

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fever twice. When you allot me

room

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, I thought it would be quite airy and ventilated

room

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with full fledge amenities but

this

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is contrary to my expectations.

In addition

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to it, I was expecting to get a single

room

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1st

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the 1st

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floor but

this

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7th

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the 7th

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floor where no

any

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apply

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window for ventilation and fresh air is. I would request you to shift my

room

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so that I can concentrate on my study with full zeal and zest. I am ready to pay extra charges if required. I am highly grateful to you for your favour in

this

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regard. Yours sincerely, Sehrish

kayani

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
14
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

200 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He/She has asked for your advice.

Many people today are worried about the large quantities of waste produced by ordinary households. What problems are caused by household waste, and what solutions may be possible in both the short and the long term?

Some people think that famous people's support towards International aid organisations draws attention to problems, while others think that celebrities make the problem less important.Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

what extent has the internet made life more convenient? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Question. Happiness is considered very important in life,why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness. Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your own knowledge and experiences.