Your are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter Say what the problem is Describe the accommodation you thought you were getting Ask the provider to solve the problem

Dear Sir, I am writing to grab your attention on a serious matter which I am facing in my residence. I am not happy with
this
accommodation and facing difficulties while living here.
To begin
with, I am a foreign student from Pakistan, I took
admission
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in
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business management at your college and applied for college accommodation after getting admission. Before the commencement of
classes
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accommodation was
allot
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to me, but
room
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the room
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is too congested and there is
also
ventilation
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a ventilation
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problem.
Moreover
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gas pipe is
also
not functional due to which I have suffered
cold
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fever twice. When you allot me
room
, I thought it would be quite airy and ventilated
room
with full fledge amenities but
this
is contrary to my expectations.
In addition
to it, I was expecting to get a single
room
at
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1st
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the 1st
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floor but
this
is
at
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7th
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floor where no
any
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window for ventilation and fresh air is. I would request you to shift my
room
so that I can concentrate on my study with full zeal and zest. I am ready to pay extra charges if required. I am highly grateful to you for your favour in
this
regard. Yours sincerely, Sehrish
kayani
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