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Write a letter to the governor of the University

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Dear sir or madam I am writing to express my concern about the high levels of
noise
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 coming from the new campus restaurant, which stays open until midnight. The loud music and chatter make it very difficult to study or sleep, especially during exam periods.
This
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 situation is particularly problematic because many students, including myself, live nearby and need a quiet environment to focus on our studies and rest. The constant
noise
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 is affecting our academic performance and well-being. To address
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 issue, I propose the following solutions: 1. Reduce
noise
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 levels by asking the restaurant to lower the volume of music after 10 PM. 2. Install soundproofing to minimize
noise
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 escaping the building. 3. Enforce quiet hours after 10 PM to ensure a peaceful environment for residents. I hope you will take
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 matter seriously and take action to improve the situation. Thank you for your time and consideration. Sincerely, Snoop
dogg
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Dogg

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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider adding a brief introduction that summarizes the purpose of your letter more explicitly.
Task Achievement
In your conclusion, you might want to emphasize the importance of the changes you proposed for better impact.
Task Achievement
Clear and specific suggestions for addressing the noise issue.
Coherence and Cohesion
Well-organized paragraphs with a single idea in each, making it easy to follow your points.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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