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Employers sometimes ask people applying jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests, and whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be useful and relevant. Others disagree. Discuss booth view and give your opinion.

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In a few interviews, some employers were asking their
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 about their personal information, among those as hobbies and marshall status, some argue that
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 is useful, while others say those are irrelevant.
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, asking for personal details is considered informal
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 ask them, to understand the psychology of the
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 that they're hiring, but, breaches some privacy privileges that
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 should have violated.
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 with, few companies ask
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 about their personal life, to let them have a grasp of the
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' psychology whom they hire, due to having positive colleagues and a friendly atmosphere in the workplace, adding like-minded and optimistic
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 reduces feuds that may get and let them have a healthy relationship in the workplace.
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, apple is a perfect example of
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, they hire
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 who are positive, and those who had hope. these came out only if they ask about your personal life.
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, some believe that these
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 are unnecessary because, it doesn't help them to conclude their decisions when an applicant is proficient enough for the job, that they are hiring him, that seems to be the main argument from the
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, who thinks it's waste of time with
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, Human organisations from the EU have pointed out that more than 13% of bad bosses are misusing
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 kind of information after they are hired. In conclusion,
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 asked by the HR department to hire
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 towards split decisions, when comes to asking about their interests and relationships type of
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 of the
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 by employers.
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 it helps boost them to have positive
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, it
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 costs
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 a sense of privacy breach in their own life.
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