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University students are increasingly studying abroad as part of their studies. Do the advantages of studying abroad outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years,
university
 graduates are going to foreign
countries
 in greater proportion to pursue postgraduate degrees like M.Sc. or PhD. In my opinion, I think that
such
 a tendency has several beneficial aspects compared to any demerits it might bring.
This
 essay will portray the reasons behind my aforementioned statement. Admittedly, a number of
university
students
 favour studying abroad because they believe that they’ll be able to learn deeply and more precisely in their preferable fields as their native
countries
 don’t have enough resources or lab facilities or competent teaching staff to teach properly and fulfil their desire. By obtaining higher degrees in due time and
then
 returning back to their own
countries
, they’ll be able to contribute pretty effectively to the prosperity of their beloved nations.
In addition
, studying abroad and achieving prestigious degrees
also
 benefit the progress of their demanding careers.
For example
, a
university
 lecturer will be promoted to higher positions after obtaining a PhD degree from the USA or Europe and be able to teach his/her
students
 quite efficiently. Despite the advantages mentioned above, studying abroad has
also
 some drawbacks both for the
students
 and their native nations concerned. To commence with, getting out of the known atmosphere can cause mental trauma and anxiety for the
students
 with regard to their accommodation, food and daily household chores.
Moreover
, few
students
 get involved with myriads of activities rather than studying in foreign
countries
 like part-time jobs or solo travelling.
As a result
, they can’t complete their degree in due time and pose financial problems for themselves as well as their families.
Furthermore
, some
students
also
 decide absurdly not to go back to their own
countries
 which cause
“
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” that tends to hit the concerned nation pretty negatively as the governments have spent greatly to educate
such
 ungrateful
students
 prior to going abroad. To recapitulate, despite the negative developments behind the tendency of
university
students
 to study abroad, I think that
such
 a tendency should be welcomed due to the betterment of themselves as well as their own
countries
 which greatly outweigh the disadvantages stated earlier.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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