It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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It is really great for the youth to learn the difference between good and bad because

that is

the golden age that their major personality is being deeply created, and learning the main difference between right and wrong performs a key role in shaping their personality.

Although

I am totally against punishments, I quite believe that removing privileges is an effective method for making rebellious kids pay for their wrong actions.

Punishment

is not essential and

actually

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hard strictness is doomed to ignite fear in

children

which makes them get terrified of their

parents

and other adults. There is no denying the fact that "Fear is the mother of lies."

In other words

, kids are so petrified of the

punishment

especially physical ones so that they begin to lie.

For instance

, when little

children

break something valuable by accident, they lie about it because of fear.

In addition

fortunately

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gone are the days, strict

teachers

mistakenly maintained that tough

punishment

made an important contribution to success in teaching and they repeatedly punish their students for not handing in their school assignments before deadlines.

This

was not only an inappropriate solution, but

also

it made them scared and lie. Luckily modernism leaves no stone unturned to abolish hard

punishment

. Nowadays not only wise

parents

but

also

caring

teachers

employ conversing

instead

punishment

and

this

exerts a wonderful effect on

children

Therefore

, the less they get scared, the more honest they will be. So physical

punishment

does not seem to serve as a remedy for discipline. In some rare critical situations when talking fails, there will be no greater substitute rather than

punishment

. By

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I mean curbing

children

and making them pay, for ,instance spoiled

children

should be forbidden from sitting beside their friends by

teachers

, and

parents

should make them help with house chores or put them in detention. It is good to make them face the adverse consequences of their actions. It always seems to me that whatever you do neither

punishment

nor talking, you will never achieve complete success in teaching

children

and in the end they will choose whatever they tend to. To conclude both

punishment

and talking are necessary, but

parents

and

teachers

are not supposed to go so far in either of them. If they do it logically, they will see the desired outcome.

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