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Everyone should become vegetarian because they do not need to eat meat to have healthy diet .do you agree or disagree?

#meat #diet
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It is sometimes argued that the consumption of
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 and other related products is not necessary for human health. all essential nutrients could be found in herbs and fruits .while many people encourage others to become vegetarian, believe that humans ought to eat
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 and other dairy products which bring some health benefits. There are several reasons why I am against being a vegetarian.
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,
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 includes various nutrients and vitamins which are essential for our fitness and we couldn’t find them in any other food categories. lack of these ingredients leads us to severe disease. children are the most sensitive groups, especially those aged between 2-6 which their body requires various
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 products for growing.
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, our daily energy is provided by these types of foods. I remember that I used to try to stop eating food just for three days. during these days I understood a sharp drop in my energy level as consequence, concentration become hard for me.
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, some people think that
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 could supply us with whatever our body needs, they
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 say that, if you search the history, you would realize that people mainly use
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 and fruits as their main meals rather than
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.
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, they used to be healthier than the present time.
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, according to some,
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 could have a detrimental effect on our physical well-being. By consuming
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 we could live longer as our bodies could digest
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 easier than
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. In way of conclusion, while there are various ideas about stopping using
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, I believe that we have to eat numerous ingredients to live healthier.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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