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Parents often give children everything ask for and do what they like. Is it good for children? What is the consequence when they grow up.

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In recent years, it is considered crucial to fulfilling the demands of
children
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 as it shows love and cares for them.
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 it is very good to provide everything yet fulfilling every demand can become a cause careless attitude among
children
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. According to my point of view, there should be checks and balances in the upbringing of
children
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otherwise
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 it will lead them to develop a selfish personality. It is needless to say that in
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 competitive era
parents
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 are doing their best to bring up
children
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, but the notion of providing everything should be considered wrong. It is the nature of
children
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 to desire
things
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 that they do not have, and even after having those
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 they do not care about them.
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, some
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 have an enormous wish to get play station because they are impressed by their fellow gadgets, after having play stations they lose interest and demand something
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 as mobile phones, tablets, and laptops. Constantly, they are impressed by their surroundings and try to get each and every luxury which sometimes their
parents
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 cannot afford. By fulfilling every demand rather than valuing people and societies,
children
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 are learning to love materialistic
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.
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, giving every luxury to
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 can damage their personalities. Because it is human nature that if he gets everything without effort, he never values its importance.
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 to it, there should be a reward system for
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 so that they behave well to get something. Bringing up
children
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 is not a piece of cake for
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, to exemplify; it is noticed that
children
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 of financially affluent families are more indulged in social evils as compared to middle-class families. The main reason behind
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 ethical gap is their financial status and their
parents
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 provide them according to their demands. Shortly, societies that never run for materialistic
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 are no place to live other than heaven. In conclusion, providing everything to
children
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 might not be fruitful to some extent as
children
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 think it is their right that their demands get fulfilled.
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, they should be taught to put effort into getting something so that they can lead a happy and prosperous life on their own.
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