Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.otgers argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Give your opinion.

Nowadays, many employees in companies of various sizes are working distantly, from home.
This
way of working has given many
people
numerous opportunities, and it may have changed our outlook on
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development of professions, having largely impacted us during the
period
of the lockdown, which stroke us as a bolt from the blue.
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many employees it has been long desired not
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to commute on a daily basis, wasting both
time
and money.
This
advantage, which homeworking possesses is
undoubtable
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, as well as it is
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undoubtedly
that the burden of having to get to work on
time
affects the
time
person sleeps,
thus
also
affecting his mental and physical condition. What follows after onerous commuting, is the working process itself, which may involve companionship with haughty, rancorous and irritating
people
or managers and bosses giving a hard
time
and all
this
is quite enough to fly off the handle one day, repercussions of which can certainly be quite infelicitous. For many, working at home, away from all these annoying factors may
also
contribute to better productivity, which may thereby improve your career or you could simply work a bit more than usual for better earnings and
that is
perfectly possible with working at home. There are some subtle disadvantages,
however
,
for instance
, if the atmosphere in an office prior to the homeworking
period
hadn’t been so adverse, one might find themselves feeling a bit lonely for there might be a lack of touch between them and their colleagues, which hadn’t
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up previously. But, overall, some mentioned advantages really do greatly over(out)weigh some problems homeworking may bring about. Given all these facts at my disposal, it is to nobody’s surprise, that in my opinion working distantly is a great solution to many problems billions of
people
run up against, a way in which
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mental and physical health of
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all over the earth may be improved. Not only am I judging it by building up all
this
theory, but I
also
have some practical experience which confirms it.
Thus
, I myself had
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of not working, but studying at school online, and
this
online
period
contributed to a
period
of great productivity in my studies
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when I
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completed some enormous amounts of work in a blink of an eye. By all means, working online has become a groundbreaking experience for many countries,
people
and companies, which can become a dawn for future industry and make
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a better place.
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