Nowadays, the crime rates among adolescents are dramatically gone up all around the world, especially in metropolis. I reckon
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ratio of unschooled generation, unfortunately.
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with, it is undoubted fact youngsters tend to leave school before completing high education level. Linking Words
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around us. That sort of person prefers to commit a crime to gain money rather than work a regular job. Due to they do not have a bachelor's degree diploma, they do not have Use synonyms
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For instance
, my neighbour from college, who has been educated to be an engineer, stopped studying in his senior. He had been employed at a café. After a while he started to complain about her work. 2 years ago, I learnt he had caught while he is stealing money from the cash box. So it has resulted in Linking Words
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On the other hand
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as being dishwasher or cashier, if they complete education on the relative side it should affect their salary.
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