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The best way for governments to solve the problem of traffic congestion is providing free public transport in 24 hours per day, and seven days a week. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#governments #traffic #congestion #transport #hours #seven #week
Nowadays, traffic jam is a debatable concern that many authorities are struggling to find solutions
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 whether proving free
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transport
trasport
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transport
or not,
it
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is one of the
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 of
this
 issue. I strongly agree with
this
 statement. There are some reasons for my agreement regarding
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 topic.
Firstly
, proving people with free public
transport
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 reduces the greenhouse effect that private vehicles are emitting
everyday
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,
in
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specially
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 during peak hours.Commuters will take the bus rather than drive their own cars to get anywhere they need.
Moreover
,
in
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private
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the private
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vehicle
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 there can
transport
 only a limited number of
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passengers
passangers
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passengers
,which is opposite to the bus.As a consequence, the number of vehicles automatically will decline during rush hours.
For example
, in Romania, the authorities organised a campaign that weekly will be a day free of charge in private transit means, and
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surprisingly
suprisingly
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surprisingly
 the number of
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passengers
passangers
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passengers
 had almost doubled.
In addition
, public
transport
, buses, are
more
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cheaper than private cars.
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communicating
communiting
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commuting
 to work, the car owners have to pay almost
one
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third
 of their income
in
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 fuel and diesel. What is more,
the
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travelers
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 do not have to spend money on the
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maintenance
maintance
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maintenance
 as they would do for their vehicles. those are some of the
reason
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 for my accordance, towards making
the
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public
transport
 free. in
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conclusion
coclusion
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,
although
 it is believed that public
transport
 is not that flexible and
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comfortable
confortable
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comfortable
 for the
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passengers
passangers
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passengers
,
i
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 still believe that
this
 could
safe
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 the environment and
also
 solve the
problems
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 of long waiting hours in the lanes.
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