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Housing is essential for people . Some argu that government should offer free housing for people who can not afford it.do you agree or disagree with this statement

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Governments provide facilities to their subjects all around the
world
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,the most basic of those include food,medicine,and
shelter
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.I agree that governments should provide free housing,which is a basic
life
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 commodity,in order to prosper as a nation but sadly,our
world
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 is divided into the developed and under-developed classes where states are sometimes unable to provide their citizens with the primary
life
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 necessities.
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 with,for a nation to grow,it should be the duty of the
state
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 to provide its subjects with a primary
life
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 commodity like
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shelter
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 for those who may not be able to afford it.If a
state
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 is successful in arranging the living accommodation for its homeless subjects
then
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 those already depressed homeless souls may have one less thing to worry about and they may have a better chance to stand on their own feet sometime soon with
this
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state
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's help.
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, in developed
countries
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such
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 as USA and Japan,where homeless
people
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 are provided with temporary
shelter
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 by the
state
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,those
people
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 usually are successful in tackling the hard phases of their
life
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.
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,governments should provide
the
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facility of
shelter
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 to a citizen who is not able to afford it by themselves.
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,financial strain on the
state
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 economy is
also
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 a limiting factor for the states in providing free living facilities.Some developed
countries
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 can provide
this
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 facility bearing the financial burden but most of the other
countries
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 of the
world
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 can not as they do not have enough resources to do so,especially the
third
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world
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countries
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 where
people
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 have limited access to food and medicine which are vital to
life
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.
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,looking at the African states,it can be clearly observed that they may not be able to provide their citizens with free
shelter
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 homes any time soon.To reiterate,providing free housing may not be feasible for most
countries
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 around the
world
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 anytime soon. To summarise,arranging living accommodations may put the economy of the
state
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 under strain.
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,
countries
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 should do it where they can and look upon it as a price to pay for a better
life
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 for their
people
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.
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