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shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same period.

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The table represents the variation between the count of Ashdown Museum visitors in one year before and one year after its refurbishment. While
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 the two figures illustrate the percentage of people's satisfaction with their visit in response to surveys asking about their opinions in the same couple of years. It's clear that the number of visitors increased after the refurbishment to reach 92,000
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 after it was 74,000 the period before. During the period before replenishment, a Significant number of people were dissatisfied (40%), While, 10% were very dissatisfied. While, Only 15% were very satisfied, and 30% were satisfied. Looking at the time after reopening in more detail, We can see that the negative opinions showed a dramatic fall after restoration. The dissatisfied community decreased to 15%, the very dissatisfied percentage fell to its half by 5%. In sharp contrast to that, the Satisfied population increased from 30% to 40%.
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, The very satisfactory percentage jumped from 15% to 35%. It is noticeable that the number of nations not responding remained the same, by 5% in both years.
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