IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Some people think that government should spend money for faster public transportation, others think that there are other important priorities of public transport (cost, environment). Discuss both view and give your opinion.

#people #government #money #transportation #priorities #transport #cost #environment
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Transportation
Use synonyms
 transit in the present
time
Use synonyms
 has a variety to choose from, it is an important part of daily life. In
this
Linking Words
 topic, which priorities of the administration budget should spend on
transportation
Use synonyms
, some people have been arguing about faster or other methods that are more essential.
Firstly
Linking Words
, quick transport is about
time
Use synonyms
, The
time
Use synonyms
 is a consequence of humans that should not
waste
Wrong verb form
wasting
show examples
time
Use synonyms
 on travel.
Moreover
Linking Words
, staying in a car or bus for a long
time
Use synonyms
 can affect human capacity in overcrowded, they lose
time
Use synonyms
 with nothing.
This
Linking Words
 group of personnel has commented the government should spend
money
Use synonyms
 to build faster
transportation
Use synonyms
, which makes
time
Use synonyms
 to do other important tasks in their life.
Secondly
Linking Words
, some people think
transportation
Use synonyms
 is sufficient. Because most population need public transport every day,
such
Linking Words
 as going to work or travelling to other locations, they give priority to other things. Especially, with the environment, it is a significant part of the routine, which can affect mental health.
Additionally
Linking Words
, the cost of transport is an expense every day, so government should be considering
this
Linking Words
 method because
money
Use synonyms
 is much sensitive topic that depends on personnel.
Besides
Linking Words
, some populations believe of build faster public
transportation
Use synonyms
 is lost much budget more than increasing better environment and reducing costs, which is the best way to use a similar amount of payment with greater results. In my opinion, I would prefer to agree with wasting
money
Use synonyms
 on the environment or cost than quickly travel. Because I am mostly concerned with mental health and
transportation
Use synonyms
 cannot avoid using it with my routine.
Besides
Linking Words
, I need to decrease the fixed costs of travelling and use
this
Linking Words
money
Use synonyms
 for other living parts.
Submitted by pinkiestima on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: