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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects?

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In today's world, the population grow up fast. The needs
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food
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also
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 grow spontaneously with the population. As to support the huge amount of population, some countries are trying to make use of edible
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insect
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insects
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 as
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food
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a food
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source
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. For having
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insect
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insects
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food
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source
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, there are more
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 than
harms
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 for the world.
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, the nutrition of
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are
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 high as normal
food
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benefit
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 of having insects. There are
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nutrition
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 as proteins inside each
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. Just a small
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consumption
comsumption
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consumption
 can support human's daily nesseccities. It is important as being
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a food resource
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 resources. Daily nesseccities of a large group of people can to supported by eating
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an insect
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insect
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insects
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. The high nutrition level of
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one
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 of having
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insect
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insects
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food
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, the reachable
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insect
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 is way easier than other
food
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. Insects are everywhere in
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nature
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. It is easy to reach them and get a large amount of it.
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, it has a shorter them for
waiting
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 them to grow. At the
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same
smae
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same
 time,
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the insect
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insect
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insects
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 may not need
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 to take care
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. Not like plants like rice or fruit, people need to take care of it most of the time to let
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 grow well. It is easier for people to consume
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insect
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 as it is easy to reach.
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, there are
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for
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 having
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insect
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insects
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food
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. The most serious impact is it will harm the
ecosystem
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also
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one
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part
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in
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ecosystem
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. They are the
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the animals
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bird
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 different
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insect
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insects
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also
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food
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 of the others. If
human
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humans
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 start consuming edible
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insect
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insects
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,
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ant
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, it will cause a large group of
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insect
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disappear
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in
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the
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nature
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for
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a
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sudden
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cause
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 great harm to
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nature
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 as other animals may become lack
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food
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. With the great
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decrease
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decrese
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decrease
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 their
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, those will get die because of staffing. It will cause a
break down
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 of
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ecosystem
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a human
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human
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 is consuming
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others'
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creatures
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food
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 of the drawbacks of eating insects. In
conculde
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conclude
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are
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 more
benefit
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in
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 having
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food
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, the drawback of harming the
ecosystem
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in
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a
long term
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affect
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nature
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. And human will
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 be affected in
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 day with the less type of species we can choose to it other than
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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