Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable, while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
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people
consider
that contemporary Change the verb form
considers
technology
can make everyone communicable,
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since
others believe that it is not true. In my opinion, new devices are not making Correct word choice
while
people
more sociable. This
essay will discuss both points of view.
On the one hand, cutting-edge technology
helps people
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their everyday’s
everyday’s
life. Many skills are developed thanks to new inventions. Change noun form
everyday
For instance
, using smartphones is an indispensable tool for the twenty-first
century. It assists working
, studying and Change preposition
in working
to be
aware of all the events in the world. Modern devices give opportunities to interact with Change the verb form
being
people
using the Internet over long distances. Everybody can make new acquaintances and keep in touch with friends on social media.
On the other hand
, despite technological advancement has offered many abilities to communicate with people
online, it does not replace live communication. New gadgets take up reality, therefore
, many humans refuse to make friends offline in the park because they are afraid to speak face-to-face. Online communication is a good opportunity, but people
forget how to have Add an article
a conversation
conversation
in everyday life. Fix the agreement mistake
conversations
Moreover
, this
problem makes people
close in
themselves, not sociable and shy. Change preposition
to
For instance
, a recent study in Nigeria identified the use of modern technology
as a major impediment to efforts for making youths more friendly and interactive.
In conclusion, citizens are using many innovations, therefore
, new devices are changing our world so far. In my opinion, modern technologies should make people
better, more mobile and communicative, but today it's the other way around. I consider technology
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makes
people
less sociable.Submitted by Allazhar on
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