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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Medicine services could be free in each country of the modern
world
, especially currently medical cures which are costlier in daily life. I firmly agree with
this
 notion, cause a multitude of
countries
 in the whole
world
 can not live without health and pharmaceuticals. They are the most main factors of vital activity.
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First
 of all, healthcare services are significant issues in government affairs starting from the necessary vaccines, examinations of the child's health, and ending with the treatment of serious diseases like oncology.
Therefore
, it is pivotal help to
people
 with disabilities with basic needs and social
pakcage
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package
. For
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instance
intance
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instance
, in
Finland
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 the government provide
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so much medical support for parents who have a little child despite their financial sufficiency.
Moreover
, citizens could use complete medical services.
Consequently
, it has been shown that residents of Scandinavian
countries
 are
more
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happier and healthier than others. Another reason for that
,
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 is by doing treatment encourages
people
 prevention to a multitude of sorts of illnesses. As is seen, not developing states have complex problems
which
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connected with wellness and the spread of terrible infections around the
world
. As an example, I could say a disease like -
a
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monkeypox spread due to a lack of hygiene and there were no protective measures that could protect many
people
. In conclusion, medical treatments are an essential tool for improving the quality
citizens'
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 life
of
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the majority of
countries
 in the
world
, including overpriced medicaments.
Countries
 with high healthcare support are the delightest and s healthful ones.
By contrast
, another group of
people
 has dreadful ramifications from unsanitary conditions and lack of medicines. They showed a substantial appreciation of medicine worldwide.
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