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You travelled abroad and faced problems at airport. Write an letter to the airport manager and provide -your flight details -what is problem -suggest some improvements you want to see

#airport #manager #-your #flight #-what #-suggest #improvements
Dear Sir/Madam,
This
 humble piece of
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paper wishes to raise your attention to some aspects of
airport
service
 that I have faced
last
 week. I am afraid but,I never expected
this
 kind of
service
. My name is Misbaha and I
had
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travelled from IGI
Airport
 Delhi to Dubai for family holidays.My flight number was AI-239
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 departed at 6 pm according to Indian time and landed there around 10:30 pm. In fact, it was
pleasant
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 journey,
however
 regarding the
airport
service
 It made me a bit sad.
To begin
, I waited one hour for immigration clearance in
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 queue. As my family was with me so, its was became harsher to manage my children because they started crying. Even though, I requested from the
airport
 staff that my children are feeling uncomfortable yet
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 one turned to me. Once I reached to counter
then
 I asked to officer
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why only two counters are operating, and he replied to me in
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 way that it is not non of
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 business
subsequently
,I feel humiliated. I would to like emphasize that please some amendment is really needed in terms of
service
 and hospitality.
Firstly
,
Airport
 staff must be polite as it reflects our nation’s image on an international level.
Secondly
, there must several counters open to avoid any
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of
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 passengers along with some
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emergency
emgergency
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emergency
service
 if required.
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 response is highly appreciable and I am looking forward to
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 from your side. Yours Sincerely Misbah Mzahir
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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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