Some people believe that money is the best gift for teenagers while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There are some opinions about that. Nowadays, humans give different things as
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. While some argue that money is a good gift for teenagers, others claim that it has a negative impact on teenagers. I, on my part, believe that teenagers should be given more books as gifts. To commence with the view on the former group. There are two reasons behind their position.
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it that. Some people think that money is the best present for adults because choosing a present is difficult.
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, during adolescence, they want to get a lot of
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. Parents hesitate to give presents.
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, people prefer to give money. It has a negative impact
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life. They may was it on
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instance, playing video games and
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addicted to alcohol.
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other arguments exist too, but the ones mentioned, I believe, do stand out. Turning to the latter
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point of view, they
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some teens use it for
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if someone gifts them cash, they could get the required materials for their interests.
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, book reading is a famous happy maintained by teens and they want to select
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their own genre and buy it. The availability of other arguments is undeniable, but mentioning them is not worthy. In conclusion,
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humans
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different views. I personally believe that cash gifts are the best presents
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.
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, they get what they want through it.
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their favourite meals, clothes and shoes
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial responsibility
  • budget
  • save
  • informed spending decisions
  • personal preferences
  • practical and efficient
  • unwanted or inappropriate gifts
  • impersonal
  • emotional value
  • thoughtfulness
  • personal consideration
  • wise financial decisions
  • frivolously
  • lasting memories and experiences
  • educational courses
  • hobby-related equipment
  • long-lasting positive impact
  • fostering interests and skills
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