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Some believe it is important for cities and towns to invest heavily in building large outdoor public spaces. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 it is important for cities to invest heavily in building large open public
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. I think the government should invest in building huge open
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 for residents because it will bring great benefits to both
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 and society. A good reason to invest in a building is that it provides comfort for
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 with large families. Nowadays
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 are willing to have more children in their families because their parents want to have the opportunity to leave a mark in the future for their son or daughter. Another point to consider is that open
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 help promote tourism and
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 attract visitors from all over the world to see and enjoy the natural beauty of the area. Before
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 development, the city was popular for business visits. The construction of the central park not only allowed local residents to participate in various events
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 but
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 attracted non-business visitors from all over the world.
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, some
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 think that spending a lot of money on outdoor
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 is a complete waste. They think, but the demand for clean air and greenery cannot be ignored. In conclusion, investing in open
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 improves the image of the city and promotes tourism officials should allocate a balanced budget according to the
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 needs of the city.
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