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Some believe it is important for cities and towns to invest heavily in building large outdoor public spaces. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Although
 it is important for cities to invest heavily in building large open public
spaces
. I think the government should invest in building huge open
spaces
 for residents because it will bring great benefits to both
people
 and society. A good reason to invest in a building is that it provides comfort for
people
 with large families. Nowadays
people
 are willing to have more children in their families because their parents want to have the opportunity to leave a mark in the future for their son or daughter. Another point to consider is that open
spaces
 help promote tourism and
also
 attract visitors from all over the world to see and enjoy the natural beauty of the area. Before
it's
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 development, the city was popular for business visits. The construction of the central park not only allowed local residents to participate in various events
,
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 but
also
 attracted non-business visitors from all over the world.
Finally
, some
people
 think that spending a lot of money on outdoor
spaces
 is a complete waste. They think, but the demand for clean air and greenery cannot be ignored. In conclusion, investing in open
spaces
 improves the image of the city and promotes tourism officials should allocate a balanced budget according to the
growth
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 needs of the city.
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