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Fast food is becoming one part of life everywhere:this has bad effect on our lifestyle and diet. To what extent agree or disagree.

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People
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 have created several aims to facilitate for yourself lifestyle they use fast food a lot because they went they do not cook meals as well as do not spend a lot of time using foodstuff it is agreed or
disagreement
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 will be discussed in the essay. The more active
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 are the greater their need for meals. But it is not a must-eat foodstuff because many vitamins and kkal have not to feed.
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 many illnesses because
of
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 poor nutrition.
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people
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 should eat feed when they are bored with national food. But
usually
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 humans eat snacks when they go to work, school and other as they do not late to work. ,
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 snacks are sold to young children in some schools
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for
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 example:my little sister every day gets money
by
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 dad because she is hungry at the school shop. She eats a hot dog, hit launch and others. It is very injured her health so I try to prepare a launch for him to take to school. In ,summary it is not good to eat semi-prepared food so humans must try not to use snacks. On another hand,hand you do not waste time cooking. If you have some product you can make fare.It is to do away with
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 if you have an egg meet onion, you will make good something. To conclude, in spite of the fact that junk foods are delicious and admired by the masses of all groups these impose a plethora of health issues as well as make
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 unhealthy and overweight. ,
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Nevertheless
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 I firmly believe that the consumption of these items is harmful to our bodies and mental health

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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